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A look at what is currently available on eBay
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Rate this poem for me?
At first sight, my heart opens and rush,
She has me trapped within her gaze,
Her eyes, her beauty freezes me, afraid to move
That I might miss my chance to make a move
I decipher the moment I am I locked in
Her fingers, like sun light between mine,
warm and welcoming
Her smile, the sole definition of happiness
A move I make to feel her kiss, soft and forgiving
She has smelted away my childish pride
Exposing my iron of man, willing to sacrifice
For no longer, have i need for riches and fame
With her, my wealth is her love
What deed have I done to deserve such grace
I do not wish to be the Thomas of this divinity,
Voiceless, I remain patient and faithful
For a crime it be to let this kite free
Mother nature has cast you before me
I shall nurture you, to be queen of the earth
Btw, please leave suggestions on how to make it better
I would like to preface this by saying that poetry is a form of release and it is all good, it is just not all meant for the public. This reminds me a lot of assignments that i would give out while assisting a writing teacher i once had - it sounds as though you were either given specific words or and or ideas to use, and or certain types of metaphor. it is a solid concept, all consuming love and passion for a woman - but it is crippled delivery. some of the words that you are using are either used completely incorrectly and out of context, OR they are not explained well if at all. you jump from large words and deep ideas to shallow items, reference pagan and christian mythos illogically, and it is at times repetitive. either you do not feel what you have written or you have a very hard time translating emotions into verse. if the latter is the case then i would recommend reflecting on each line as part of the whole and determine if it is really conveying what you are emoting.
